Its a nice design, but it looks too obnoxious on the shirt, like as if the shirt were yelling at you… Nice design and all, +1

I like where it’s going I just think it needs a little refining. The background or beige-ish strokes in particular bother me.
If they were cleaned up and it was on white I would like.

Thanks for the input melanies & Intrepid. I was really into this drawing when I did it, I guess I let my fondness of it take presidence over the compasition.