I tried my best to give as thoughtful a critique as I could — I happen to love those movies, as well as your work, haha.
I’d suggest posting stuff in the “Works in Progress” (WIP) threads in the forums for feedback. A lot of the super active members are in there and give feedback, and can really help give ideas/perspectives in terms of improvement.
Also, welcome to DBH and congrats on your first submission!
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